№1 For students
Hello, guys!
Do you want to have unforgettable holidays? We have a special offer for you. Our private language school organizes a trip to London for a language course. It’ll be in one of the most famous and best universities in the world – Cambridge. During it you can improve your English. And we don’t care how well you know it! That’s the coolest that you’ll see the most beautiful sights of London. There will be students from different cities and even countries. It’ll be very interesting to make friends with them. You can communicate with them on every topic and spend the best time in the evenings in the atmosphere of a great fun. We’re sure you’ll enjoy the whole trip. We’re waiting for YOU!
№2 For their parents
Our private language school organizes a language course in London. It will take place in one of the most prestigious universities – Cambridge. Your child will be able to improve his/her knowledge of the English language communicating with the native speakers. And it is one of the most effective ways to learn the language. Every day there will be many excursions in the famous and fascinating places of London. Your child will get a great opportunity to see a lot of London’s sights. As the group of students will consist of students from different cities and countries, your child will be able to meet many interesting people, communicate with them and find out a lot of new information. So we hope that you will become interested in our offer.
Hello, guys!
Do you want to have unforgettable holidays? We have a special offer for you. Our private language school organizes a trip to London for a language course. It’ll be in one of the most famous and best universities in the world – Cambridge. During it you can improve your English. And we don’t care how well you know it! That’s the coolest that you’ll see the most beautiful sights of London. There will be students from different cities and even countries. It’ll be very interesting to make friends with them. You can communicate with them on every topic and spend the best time in the evenings in the atmosphere of a great fun. We’re sure you’ll enjoy the whole trip. We’re waiting for YOU!
№2 For their parents
Our private language school organizes a language course in London. It will take place in one of the most prestigious universities – Cambridge. Your child will be able to improve his/her knowledge of the English language communicating with the native speakers. And it is one of the most effective ways to learn the language. Every day there will be many excursions in the famous and fascinating places of London. Your child will get a great opportunity to see a lot of London’s sights. As the group of students will consist of students from different cities and countries, your child will be able to meet many interesting people, communicate with them and find out a lot of new information. So we hope that you will become interested in our offer.
2 comments:
On the one hand you've provided your audience with valuable information about the language school, but on the other there are some problems with the style of the first one and supporting details of them both.
"Guys" and "cool" are informal while most of the letter is quite formal; also, the sentence structure is formal. Details should be more specific: dont't say you can communicate on every possible topic, make a suggestion; don't say there will be an unforgettable atmosphere, describe what will make it such.
In your letter to parents you mention excursions to London, but it takes you a couple of hours to get there from Cambridge. Then classes will be shorter, right? But what about the program of study? Aren't students invited to a language school? How can they improve their English?
Sure, now i understand that there should have been much more specific details. If i want to persuade to take part in the courses, i should give much full bright information. Is it right?
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