1. It is very fulfilling to help others because
1).it gives me great fun to recognise the happiness of other people;
2).other people will help me when I am in troubles;
3).it gives me the feeling of the importance of my advise or help among the people;
2. Honesty is the most valuable trait of a friend's character because
1).it is a base of trust;
2).there is no frank and sincere relationship between people;
3).only a frank friend never betray you;
3. Passing my degree my greatest achievment so far because
1).it makes self-esteem higher;
2).it improves my educational skills;
3). it gives a new purpose in life;
4. My studies is the one thing that give me real satisfaction because
1).communication with other interesting people;
2). an opportunity to get knowledge in the systematic way;
3). it ia a way to show new ideas and to put them in the real life;
5. Using a computer is pribably one of the most important skills for a person nowadays because
1). it is an opportunity of fast communication with people who are in distance with you;
2). it gives access to different informational sources;
3). it helps to save time during the work with different kind of information;
6. Feeling competent about doing my job gives me confidence because
1). I am constantly doing my work carefully;
2). I will be ready to any unpredictable troubles and difficulties in my job;
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Irinka, I think that you've done a great work. I like all your thesis statements especially about studies. It will be interesting for me to read your essay about it.
But I think that your 2 point about honesty is not very good, it's not clearly enough why "there is no frank and sincere relationship between people". May be you should add "without such trait as honesty".
Irina--
Parts of the thesis statement in the pattern we are using to construct them should be formulated using parallel structures. See if this is the case in #1, 2, 4.
Th st-t #1: advise vs advice; altogether, it should be formulated in a more concise way: ... joy to see other people happy...
Th st-t #2: your points are quite similar - it's difficult to write separate paragraphs about them.
Th st-t #3: what is "passing your degree"? Then, it is something with a result already, right? What tense is used in E to express results?
Th st-t #4: point #1 is incomplete; also, all the points should be made more specific.
Th st-t #5: what is the difference b/w points 2 and 3?
Th st-t #6: not clear - the connection b/w doing your work carefully and feeling competent is not clear; point 2: "troubles" is a bad choice of word. What about point #3?
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